The outline for your literacy narrative is due today. Typed or printed neatly. Hand in or email to me.

We are going to be focusing on precise language today.

Sometimes communication can go wrong.

Don’t be like these guys. Be aware of how you can possibly be misunderstood. Use careful, specific language! Only be vague when you want to be.


What do you think the purpose of writing the outline after the draft is? The outline can help you see how you are structuring the narrative. It can also help you see what you included and what you left out. Comparing it to your narrative can show where you have more than one point of focus or where you are not focused. Are you writing too much for one point? Is one point too short?

Finding and Replacing

There are many words that we use regularly which are vague and can be improved when we revise. Look for the words very, good, well, and a lot. You can do search by hitting control + f.


Saying It

Steinbeck advised that when writing dialogue, to say it aloud as we write it. Only then will it have the sound of speech. Last class we worked on adding dialogue to the narratives. Today we will be reading the dialogue out loud and the rest of the narrative. This is one of the best ways to revise your work. You can read to yourself or read to a classmate. Having an audience will make you pay close attention to what you are saying. Some people also cover one ear when they read to themselves and swear that they can hear the words different and catch more mistakes. Try out these strategies for yourself and see which one works best for you.

Showing Instead of Telling: Description

We worked on description last class as well. To help with this find a picture of what you are trying to describe. Having it in front of you helps you to be more descriptive. If you are describing learning all the buttons and knobs in a car, you can try to draw the dashboard of a car from memory in order to recall specific details. You can also search for a car dashboard online and have that in front of you as you are writing your description. What do you see? Be specific and clear so that your audience can follow along.

Discuss Goodman

Goodman urges writers to “go back to your library, your forest, your newspaper, your family, your day job… All these are teeming with life…” If you are still looking for more inspiration, come up with places you can go in your own life, to find something to write about. If you are writing about learning to drive, go back to your car or the car you learned in and sit down. What comes to mind? What can you describe or include in your narrative to help communicate your point of view?

Transition Words 


Your homework for Tuesday is to revise your essay. Incorporate everything we did this week and bring a second or third draft in. We will be working on using images next week, so write ideas down if you come up with some so you do not forget.

Have a good weekend everyone.